Guest Aluigi Posted October 25, 2004 Posted October 25, 2004 Hey, ever realized how valuable of a resource PhatMass can be for school? Well, I just decided to dedicate this thread to confirm random bits of knowledge that I want to randomly mention in essays and such. My first question: does shakespear ever have damned souls with rattling chains? or is that dickens? what would be the most sophisticated reference to rattling chains on damned souls that I could reference to modern clothing styles that have a bunch of chains all over them? thanks a bunch in advance
Guest Aluigi Posted October 25, 2004 Posted October 25, 2004 this is the sentence I did, edit it if you feel so inclined.. this paper's 200 points and will either give me that 4th A in a weighted class I need so badly to get my QPA up to impress college or it will drag me into a mediocre B that I won't be able to salvage before the end of the grading period [quote]Considering today’s preferred styles ranging everywhere from cross dressing to baggy clothes with chains reminiscent of damned souls from a Shakespearean play, a reversion back to the age when appearance mattered would be a welcome reviver for the character virtues that remain dormant.[/quote]
Guest Aluigi Posted October 25, 2004 Posted October 25, 2004 fooey, are you gonna make me do real research on my own? wait, i think i am thinking of Christmas Carol, Dickens, with the chains... is that actually Dickens's idea or is that just from a movie i saw
Iacobus Posted October 25, 2004 Posted October 25, 2004 It is Dickens, I do belive. But I am an Janist (sp?) for what it is worth. I don't think the chains are from Shakeshpere, but I read Hamlet years ago. But I know, or at least am pretty sure, they are found in Dicken with Jacob Marley (sp?). I would play it safe and go with that. As to your sentence, isn't "a reversion" and "reviver" slightly redundent? Personaly I like it the way it is, and I doubt it will change your grade, but my Freshman English teacher, Mrs Beem *How I miss her* was nuts about reducation.
luciana Posted October 25, 2004 Posted October 25, 2004 (edited) yeah, Marley's ghost had chains which he rattled and carried w/ him in the appearance to Scrooge and on the chains were his metal money boxes which he said were heavier depending on the greed, that Scrooge's chains were going to be much longer and heavier if he didn't change. I don't remember if jacob marley's condition was permanent as in damned, or temporary, kind of like purgatory. It kind of reminds me of the parable of the rich man who wanted to warn his greedy brothers. Maybe you could find the Christmas Carol online and read the exact words that Dickens wrote. Edited October 25, 2004 by luciana
Guest Aluigi Posted October 25, 2004 Posted October 25, 2004 thanks for the help. is reversion and reviver redundant? reviver- bring revival, reversion- go back to past thing... it just seems like it would be but i don't think it is.. (i could be wrong) [quote] Considering today’s preferred styles ranging everywhere from cross dressing to baggy clothes with chains reminiscent of Charles Dickens’s version of a damned soul, a reversion back to the age when appearance mattered would be a welcome reviver for the character virtues that are so dormant today.[/quote] <anyway, great thing I discovered you can use PhatMassers for slave labor! >
Iacobus Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 LOL! We aren't your slaves. We prefer forced and unpaid employees.
Guest Aluigi Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 dope... an all new use for PhatMass... make Catholics sound smart because they have a think-tank helping decide their every move.
luciana Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 [quote] a reversion back to the age when appearance mattered would be a welcome reviver [/quote] How about instead: a return back to the age when........would be a welcome revival...
Iacobus Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 Luciana, I can smell your writing influences from 3 clicks off. It is right, in thoery, but "reversion" is a "higher" level word than "return back to." But that is just my two cents.
Guest Aluigi Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 wow... my very own think-tank i'm so happy I think Iacobus is right, and higher level words are laced throughout the essay (so it fits in that way) but thanks to Luciana for the advice as well
luciana Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 I figured you'd say that....I was going to edit it w/ the words "if you want advice from a non-English major "
Iacobus Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 I am a non English Major, I just wrote the little comic. LOL!
Guest Aluigi Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 okay, i used Guggenheim from the Titantic as an example of a male good dresser, now to make the essay more coherant I need an example from the same era of a woman who dressed modestly.. can anyone think of anyone?
Guest Aluigi Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 is there like, a good modesty story for like, a saint? perhaps St. Elizabeth Anne Seton?
Guest Aluigi Posted October 26, 2004 Posted October 26, 2004 okay i made somethin about with St. Seton, it's true and stuff and it's not like anyone would check... yeah it's a good thing what do you think of this sentence, is it awkward? if so, how could I make it less awkward keeping all the same points? [quote]Current clothing styles lack the prudence of the past as immodest dress makes women less respected tempting men to impure thoughts and actions, while the discourteous garb of men indicates and perpetuates a lack of morality.[/quote] it's like, the thesis of the paper
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